liabzahi

In response to: "Raya restaurant" 772 days old
by Aj Marcus [Visitor]

Well the description of the resturant and the decor is good. But the descrition of the food confusing. There are too many Thai words without adequate translation. There are lots of simple spelling mistakes that if you spell checked could have been changed ' garic instead of garlic.

No comments about the staff or the price either. more…

In response to: "" 772 days old
by Aj Marcus [Visitor]

The story doesn't really flow. When describing the plot, dong get too specific, try to eaplain the plot in one paragraph.

Again Liab, it's let down by some obvious grammar problems, you need to check your work before posting it. Did you use word and spell check?

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In response to: "News" 772 days old
by Aj Marcus [Visitor]

Another popular story to talk about. A good try but some simple mistakes.

We dont talk about the plane like a body... a plane has wings, tail etc.

Some grammar problems too, we will go through these together. more…

In response to: "Three Unluckily Provinces" 772 days old
by Aj Marcus [Visitor]

This is a good idea for a story. You talk about the facts of life there, teachers are shot, schools are burnt down, innocent people are killed and people are very afraid.

This story needed some background for people not familiar with the south and the roblems there.

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In response to: "Hobbies/likes/dislikes" 772 days old
by Aj Marcus [Visitor]

My favourite animal is....., my favourite colour is....

Some silly mistakes too Liab, the basketball league in America is the NBA!

Re-check your work before submitting it or even better get a friend to check it.

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